What do you guys think of my poem
All these things arent what i exspected in life i wanted more but i earned less thses tress surrounding me i feel like im living in a birds nest exspecting thins exspecting that dang i need to get my life back on track like a train screching this screching that thinking my life aint half bad but when you dont go to heaven your on your knees praying that your sins will be forgiven you always had the thought that everything will be okay but not on judement day keeo faith and try your best not to sin and maybe god will let you in

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I like it. You're a natural at it! Free verse are my favorite poems. I write poems myself but it's hard to write dark poems that have to do with depression, sorrow and things like that. I always wanted to try it but couldn't and trust me everyone has problems. So awesome work! honestly your poem depicts the sorrow, sadness, and the depressive side of what is to be down and find no meaning to anything.
 I also liked that you react and say wait a minute I gotta get up and find the positive things to life. Religion also adds hope inside the poem which makes readers feel comfortable knowing that something is their to keep up their hopes. You know something; when I first found no purpose to my life I found a website called JW.org and that helped me get going and learn what is the true origin of life. It has good advice in what I should do in life? What is the reason to live? Is evolution real? Among other things.