Hey guys, I need some help, Im doing an essay and this is my conclusion, does this sound ok?: (by the way its about the cruelty of animal testing.)

Animal testing. Yes it is bad. We use it as a “safe” way to test products and see if they will affect us in any way. Large and small name brands use this technique to make sure it is safe for people, however in the process they are harming other living things. These animals are being put through pain and cruelty and nobody is doing anything about it. These animals have feelings and are able to feel pain. They are cruelly injured during the procedures and eventually killed after the brutal process. And to add to the horrible events, sometimes animals react differently to the product than humans. So if we want products to work correctly, and animals to stop being killed, we should just begin testing these products on people for a better outcome on products and less animal cruelty.

Yes. In my opinion it sounds put together and concise. The only comments I could make on it would be to increase transitions at the beginning of sentences (to allow sentence structure to flow better and feel less chunked apart). The last thing I would say would be to rethink the first two sentences, as they feel rather simplistic and unfinished compared to the rest of your work. Overall, I strongly agree with your writing as a reader and felt the message clearly.

Great job!