Read the paragraph. I have been a nurse for twenty years. In that time, I have seen a great number of patients suffer because they did not have health insurance. One of the worst cases was a young mother of two who was diagnosed with early stage skin cancer. Because she could not afford treatment, the cancer spread from her skin to other parts of her body. By the time I saw her for the first time, the cancer had reached her brain, and she could no longer be helped. This sort of thing should not happen to anyone. A strong universal health care system could prevent instances like this from occurring. Which addition would make the paragraph more objective and effective?

Its a valid sentence, but saying "By the time I saw her for the first time..." sounds kind of messy in my opinion. I'd recommend saying "By the time I got the chance to see her..." I feel like it adds more empathy. If you can, I'd also add some experiences with her child in one sentence towards the beginning for empathy as well

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AFOKE88 AFOKE88 · Answer 2 · 2021-12-22T15:53:17+01:00

The addition would make the paragraph more objective and effective is;

The use of facts and statistics to support the anecdote.

We are reading a story about a nurse who had been working in the health sector for twenty years giving her account of observation about patients who suffered because they didn't have health insurance.

Now, she gave just one case which happened to be the worse case about a young mother that suffered from skin cancer due to lack of health insurance but she failed to give adequate facts and statistics to support her claim about why the solution of a strong universal health care system will solve the problem.

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